Wildest Temptations

This is well written, however, more details could be added. We are barely introduced to the MC, and all we know is that she isn't the greatest at Chemistry, and ...

I just thought I'd inform you that I am attempting to review your piece on my iPod Touch, and if there are any spelling errors, it's this stupid keypad, along ...

Haha! I love it, LPR! Wait! I have one thing to point out! They ran into several YWS-people, including; Nate, Kamas, silented, Lethero, Scarlet, Bolt, Juniper, Ben, Biffle, Kaedee, Temtations ...

"You know—" the red head began while setting her legs on the table. "—you could just stop going after this title, Ms. Hollow." Commas could be used instead of hyphens. ...

Ohmygoodness! I love this! It's really entertaining! The old man sounds like my grandpa, pulling a stunt like that. I didn't see any errors, and your writing is really detailed. ...

"Elena[,] come down stairs it's time for dinner!" There should be a comma after Elena. "Ok Mom[,] I’m coming!" I tried pulling it back to show my face better it ...

Definitely keep it, I really like what you've done so far. I look forward to reading more. :) Please message me when you update it. :D

I don't want to be too picky, but this is supposed to be a review, but I hope I don't bore you with mistakes, and things that could be improved. ...

It was great, although I am going to point out three minor errors. 1. ...light lavender color, who paints there house lavender.. There means to go somewhere, I.E. You stand ...

I really liked this story, perhaps one of my favorites. Anyway, I would like to point out one thing. “Why do I listen to you again?” She whispered. It didn't ...

Instead of explaining the emphasism, you could use italics , or bold the world. Also, it could use a bit of revising grammar wise. I liked it. Very detailed. I ...

I really like this. It is catching. Reminds me of a book I read, but it doesn't copy it. I think a bit more detail would bring you more readers, ...

I really enjoyed this story, although the spacing was kind of weird. It was really detailed which I like, and it kept me reading. I think that you should really ...

When Celia's mother hugged her, and said "I love you," I nearly cried. I could feel my tears welling up. This is a great story, keep up the good work. ...

Ignoring the spelling and grammar errors, I'd say that this was an amazing piece of writing. It was very detailed, and stuff like that draws the reader in, and helps ...